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Post by operativec22 on Nov 9, 2004 23:55:34 GMT
Ok. I am so used to writing fanfiction for X-Men, comic-verse so it was weird trying to switch over from writing stuff about teenagers/adults to 10 year olds. So, hopefully I was able to do a decent job on this first fic of mine. It is written from Wally's perspective (1st person) and as for any pairings, well as I said in my introduction to the newbie board, it's the whole 1/3/4 love triangle thing. Yes, 2/5 are also paired up but the story isn't really about them. I like to think I protrayed Wally rather well, but since this is my first time at it, I'm sure I'm not perfect. So any constructive criticism will be appreciated, as well as any compliments. Enjoy! www.angelfire.com/comics/kittyandkurt/kndfic.html |
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Post by numbuh3 on Nov 10, 2004 1:13:43 GMT
I think your draft is preety good. On a scale of 1-10, I think it's an 8-10.
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Post by operativec22 on Nov 10, 2004 1:17:52 GMT
I think your draft is preety good. On a scale of 1-10, I think it's an 8-10. Wow, an 8? Lol, didn't think it deserved that high of a mark. Thanks. =) What do you think needed to be improved upon if you don't mind me asking? |
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Post by numbuh3 on Nov 10, 2004 1:26:54 GMT
I don't mind you asking. You could've used more dialect. You sounded just like Numbuh 4 and how he'd react to the situation.
Hey, in Juliefoo Jojo 87's Halloween contest, it was my first try at doing a fan fic. Whaddaya know now? I came in the Top 3 in the contest with a Kids Next Door-Teen Titans crossover.
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Post by operativec22 on Nov 10, 2004 1:39:16 GMT
I don't mind you asking. You could've used more dialect. You sounded just like Numbuh 4 and how he'd react to the situation. Hey, in Juliefoo Jojo 87's Halloween contest, it was my first try at doing a fan fic. Whaddaya know now? I came in the Top 3 in the contest with a Kids Next Door-Teen Titans crossover. Yea, I was trying to go for that whole aspect of getting inside Number 4's mind and what not, hence why I had him narriate it, but more dialect huh? Yea.. I can see where I could have used a bit more.. ^^ TY. Oh really? Wow.. belated congratulations then. =) |
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Post by numbuh3 on Nov 11, 2004 18:55:47 GMT
C22, what I mean by more dialect was by the characters other than Numbuh 4. Your Numbuh 4 dialect was superb.
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Post by operativec22 on Nov 11, 2004 22:05:32 GMT
C22, what I mean by more dialect was by the characters other than Numbuh 4. Your Numbuh 4 dialect was superb. TY. Oh, lol. I knew that's what ya meant, honestly. Just testing you, and ya.... *sly smile* |
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