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Post by ilovekukiandwally on Jul 6, 2007 13:33:06 GMT
CHAPTER ONE PREVIEW:drip drip drip drip.. the sound of raindrops in the window of Kuki Sanban.She is now a teen, and now living in Japan. She doesnt have any memories about her past but she knows that something is missing. a part of her sweet childhood.Kuki!..i need my crayons! Mushi said with a pout with her face. I dunno you kid play some dollies or something! We were close Kuki! i dunno what happened i miss my sister, the one who cares. yeah yeah whatever! Yes, Kuki's sweetness seemed to be lost like every older sister hates her little sister..But yet Kuki seem very confuse it seems that she didnt know about her childhood just a blur about 4 kids playing with her and the other one seemed to care so much. So Kuki investigated..took old crummy boxes with dust.and saw pictures..a Bald kid who wears a red sweater. A fat Kid who seems to like planes, a cute japanese girl wearing a green long sleeved dress kuki knew it was her. and a little boy who didnt care about a thing,and a girl who was like the cool one. Kuki knew that they might be the missing piece.
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Post by cherrycutie1and5 on Jul 6, 2007 20:15:15 GMT
Wow, that's a great chapter, I wonder what will happen in the second one...
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Post by YazzyFrazzi on Jul 8, 2007 12:29:08 GMT
Cool i am liking it so far. Just a note, i found it really difficult to read the dark blue text. Could you perhaps not use that colour and use something else Thanks Cant wait for the next chapter
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Post by ilovekukiandwally on Jul 8, 2007 14:15:39 GMT
Editor Notes: Thanks for commenting guys! yes it has been my concern that yap the text is too dark u cant see it..soo....ill make it uhmmm pink!here we start the continuation of the preview. CONTINUATION OF CHAPTER ONE PREVIEW:
At Kuki's School, She cant help but wonder why are those kids important? She cant help but wonder!
Kuki-Chan! are you okay?
Kuki's friend Satomi cant help but to be concerned for her lovable friend.
I dunno, you know the feeling like there is this part of you that is super missing but you dont know what it is?
I guess. Maybe you should go back to where you felt happy go back to your past Kuki-Chan! It will make you fell a lot better!
Thanks Sa-chan what can i do without a friend like you!
Nothing i guess,(*giggles*) just joking!
Kuki took Sachan's advice, She went home and asked her mom to go to America.After a few begs and pleads. She was allowed but before she goes, she needs the to know a little bit about her past.Soo..
Mushi! i know u want us to be close again right?
I absolutely Do!
Then help me..tell me who are these kids? (shows picture)
ohh...thats Nigel the bald guy.Hoagie the Fat one,Wally the dumb one,And Abby the Cool One.
Tell me more...Mushi!
Mushi told her everything about the 4 mysterious kids. After a few weeks Kuki was ready to pack and leave Japan for America.She was a nervous wreck but she knows this is the only way to fill the empty hole inside her.
END OF CHAPTER ONE!
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Post by YazzyFrazzi on Jul 8, 2007 14:41:53 GMT
Cool, i hope you keep up the story Please continue PLEASE!!! (fingers crossed)
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Post by dizma on Jul 9, 2007 8:58:52 GMT
i agree with yasmin. continue!
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Post by Darrel Samaitha419 on Jul 10, 2007 8:37:03 GMT
So.......sweet...........love it!
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Post by faircod1965 on Jul 10, 2007 13:50:08 GMT
Fantastic first chapter of this fanfic story, especially when it started with Kuki as a teen living in Japan. I wonder what would happen in the next chapter, should be interesting.
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Post by ilovekukiandwally on Jul 11, 2007 9:06:18 GMT
Editor Notes: Thanks guys!ehehe..i like writing fanfics! So Lets continue! just sharing dis pic i drew CHAPTER TWO:BLAST TO PASTFLIGHT NUMBER 0796 From Japan has now landed!Kuki arrived at the airport. This was her chance to remember her past! Kuki was alone, Good Thing her father still had some friends from America. As Kuki looked for her name at the crowd. Someone shouted her name..Kuki? Kuki Sanban? Kuki tossed and turned and then she saw the one who called her, it was an old man with thick brown curly hair and a bit dark.Yes I am Kuki Sanban. Oh hi young lady! I last saw you when you still in diapers and a bottle you know?! The voice seemed familiar to Kuki but she just cant remember the guy.Well Lets ride to the Car with the wheel and window and the motor, you know!At the car Kuki was wondering why he knew the sound of his voice..it was very weird for her. How can she recognize his voice but she cant remember anything about him.As the man's car stopped infront of a classic american home.Kuki thought this was it. this is the beginning of her trip to the past.Welcome to my house, Kuki! Just come in and enjoy! ill carry your stuff just come in.Okay! Thanks Mr?Lincoln! Mr Lincoln.As Kuki went inside the house she saw two teens fighting for the phone.Can you just give me the Darn Phone!Cant you see im talking here!Are you blind? The sisters seemed familiar to her.They were like cats and dogs and Kuki was just watching but then their mother came.Girls! Dont be rude. We have a visitor from Japan.The girls stopped their fighting and looked at Kuki from head to toe.Uhmm...Hi! Im Kuki Sanban!*bows*Hi Im Cree! Im The Oldest and Prettiest!Kuki saw the other girl made a gag face at the back. it made her giggle inside. Im Abby! Did you used to be my friend?Uhmm..i guess. Abby just laughed and showed Kuki around the house when it was done they went outside the lawn for some fresh air. So..you dont remember anything about here in the US?Yes it seems like a what do you call that uhmm...a blur. yes a blur!Well...If you remember me, ill show you the others.Okay. Thanks uhmm...i forgot your name..Abby, Abigail Lincoln. After their talk..Abby's dad told Kuki to rest. Kuki was restless, She wasnt used to the timezone! So she called Mushi at her cellphone.Kuki why did you call its late here in Japan. i wanna ask you about Abby Lincoln. Ohh...did you forget again?Yes! help me sister!Okay!Mushi once again told Kuki who Abby is. After a few hours Kuki slept in the guest room. Tomorrow her life will change now she knows who Abby is, She can meet the others. Tomorrow will be the Meeting with Old friends.
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Post by dizma on Jul 11, 2007 9:28:50 GMT
great chapter! i had to select cree's dialogue to read it tough.
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Post by Darrel Samaitha419 on Jul 12, 2007 8:04:03 GMT
You could try using brighter colours. ;D But great story!!! Love it so!!
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Post by ilovekukiandwally on Jul 12, 2007 12:48:11 GMT
CHAPTER THREE: GETTING TO KNOW YOU?
The sun came shining through Kuki's window. Kuki slowly stood up and stretch and welcomed the morning sun. it wasnt her usual routine. she would stand up,take a bath and bum out. but she felt like it was a good day to skip the regular routine.Kuki went down the stairs with her pj's on. As she went into the kitchen she was shocked to see that Abby brought friends over. Kuki was embarassed for she was wearing only her pj's she ran back upstairs and changed then..
Kuki? Are you mad at my surprise?
No not at all im just embarassed because im only wearing pj's and there are people downstairs.
Oh! i guess i forgot to tell you. my bad
Its okay! ill be downstairs in a minute.
After Kuki finished dressing up she went downstairs she made the cutest smile she can make and saw a blonde boy looking at her from afar.Abby was seated next to a boy wearing a red sweater next to him was a guy who had googles on.next to him was a boy wearing a orange hoodie.
Since your here..these are our friends before.. uhmm this is Nigel,Hoagie,and Wally
Hello Kuki! i hope you remember me!
Yo Kuki Wassup?
Hey.
Kuki smiled at all of them. But when he looked at Wally she seemed very attractive to his boyish charm and bad boy attitude.Kuki felt like he was important.
So i was thinking we go to to that old treehouse at Nigel's House.
Yeah, Thats where we used to hang out and stuff.
The Gang went to Nigel's House.They were greeted by an old man with a british accent.
Nigel my boy! Is this Kuki?
yes Father.
Hello Mr. Uno!
The gang went inside the old crummy treehouse. it was smaller than before maybe because they grew a bit.They reminisce the days when they would play with their et hamsters and stuff.Then the talk turned into old flames
Nigel, i remember their was a girl. i think it was your girlfriend..her name was Lizzie?
Ohh....She still remembers Nigel!
Hahaha funny! well we broke up like i dunno uhmm...2 years ago?
It must be hard for her!
Well Kuki i know you had a flame too..like lets uhmm Wally!
Ei! Dont bring me into your lovey dovey sessions..
Oh shut up you like kuki so much!
I dont!Well how about you abby?hows Hoagie??
hey i like Cree not Abby!
After a few fights about their old flames..they went back home.As friends would do they would walk the girls home. Hoagie walked Abby and Wally walked Kuki Home.
Well Kuki here's your house.Take Care Alright!
I will.
*hugs kuki*
I missed you.
Wally walked and waved at Kuki goodbye. Kuki was left standing there she was right Wally was important to her.Kuki went inside the room. lied down but couldnt sleep maybe because she cant remember anything about wally or maybe she like him too only time can tell whats for them.
END OF CHAPTER THREE
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Post by dizma on Jul 12, 2007 13:36:46 GMT
good going there summy! everything was wel readable in this one ^_^
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Post by ilovekukiandwally on Jul 12, 2007 14:13:39 GMT
thanks haha! i tried!
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Post by john on Jul 13, 2007 5:59:59 GMT
so far a good read can't wait to read more!
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