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Post by gailoraanf on Jun 30, 2007 17:48:59 GMT
Please don't make polls for everything. But you're new, so you still are learning.
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Post by gailoraanf on Jun 30, 2007 18:23:26 GMT
Don't worry. You're doing a lot better than I did when I first joined.
Your fanfic is a bit confusing. Are these our main characters? (Nigel, Hoagie, Kuki, Wally and Abby)?
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Post by artgirlb [a.k.a. Numbuh 138] on Jun 30, 2007 20:02:33 GMT
Hmm...well, it seems okay so far. A minor critique, though - try to make the chapters longer. Chapters should be more than a few paragraphs long. The writing style is also a little tricky to follow. I'd recommend reading other fanfics, so you get a better idea of how to write this stuff. Don't give up, though.
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Post by gailoraanf on Jun 30, 2007 20:18:47 GMT
Thanx Gail and Artgirl. That means alot, you guys both being 5 star "legends" and all. Once you've been around the block once or twice, the stars don't matter. I remember being a newbie, and being amazed my five star people. Now that I'm a five star person, it's no big deal really. The stars determine almost nothing. Don't worry about them ;D
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Post by GoldenFlither on Jun 30, 2007 23:55:31 GMT
First off, I want to start off by saying this:
I'm loving your Personal Text. Pirates of the Caribbean is completely awesome. ^^
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And now, I want to say this:
Yes, indeed you should continue. I like the comedy you implied in this. Numbuh 2 is awesome. But.. (of course, there's always a "but" XD) Can I just point out one things? Just for future reference, if you know what I mean.
You don't really have to put 1.0 or 4.0 or whatever it may be. Think of it like you would think when in Math class.
That's it. I hate critisizing stories, so I try to stop myself as soon as I can. Overall, you're a great writer. The fact that you're new makes it even better. My stories were crud when I first began.
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Post by GoldenFlither on Jul 1, 2007 1:43:58 GMT
*sigh* 3/4ness. I love it, flighter. Very cool. I like how you did the same as in TAPIOCA, where somebody tells the story totally differently than what actually happened. Great stuff. That was awesome.
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Post by flighter on Jul 1, 2007 20:06:25 GMT
I'm SO sorry! All of my posts on this thread were DELETED! SOMEBODY, i'm not telling who, *cough* little sister *cough* DELETED ALL MY POSTS ON THIS THREAD WHILE I WAS IN THE BATHROOM! THEN THAT PERSON LOGGED OUT! I'M FURIOUS! *calms down* sorry about that. I hate it when my little sister does stuff like this! But do not worry! I'm making a new story SHE doesn't know about! It's in the General Creativity sub-board in the Other-main part of the forum!
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