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Post by sjedmondson on Apr 1, 2007 15:29:59 GMT
I think it's still an amazing story =).
I'm now hooked! If I could E-force you to write I would.
(Thats a compliment)
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Post by faircod1965 on Apr 1, 2007 16:02:26 GMT
Another great chapter of this brilliant story. I find this story very interesting.
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Post by digigirl02 on Apr 1, 2007 23:08:48 GMT
Another great chapter.
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Post by theorygirl on Apr 2, 2007 2:33:03 GMT
I'm intrigued....why now, indeed?
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MarEla
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Post by MarEla on Apr 3, 2007 0:40:34 GMT
An awesome story! Can't wait for the next chapter.
I would also love to see why Father hates Hoagie Sr. so much.
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Post by artgirlb [a.k.a. Numbuh 138] on Apr 9, 2007 4:32:28 GMT
GOD, this is a long chapter...oh well. I at least got all the major flashback characters introduced, so I can now focus on answering all the brought-up questions (and possibly bringing up more >:3)
Still not sure I'm happy with this though...
Chapter Four
"So...what do you think so far?" Hoagie asked Monty, unveiling his latest aircraft in the Gilligans' garage. The vehicle was essentially a camper, but it had huge rockets attached to it.
"It doesn't look like much," Hoagie continued, "But it can go over eleventy hundred miles an hour, can hold an entire team of operatives, and I'm going to be making more adjustments later this week. It'll have a weapons system, and will even be able to go into space!"
"Sounds good so far, Numbuh Two. What are you going to call it?" Monty asked, looking it over.
"Well...I'm not sure. I still haven't gotten the hang of coming up with cool names like the rest of the Kids Next Door. Still, that can wait. After those adjustments, we still gotta build that treehouse, and - "
Just then, Hoagie was interrupted, as a large, white ice cream truck zoomed past the household, as a straggling group of kids tried to keep up.
"Think it's ready for a test flight now?" Monty asked.
"Probably. Why?"
"We're going after that ice cream truck."
"Wow, do you really want ice cream that bad?"
"It's not the ice cream we're going after."
"Okay, now I'm confused."
"I'll explain on the way."
Hoagie got into the camper first and started up the engine. Monty followed, and the vehicle took off, in hot pursuit of the ice cream truck.
"So, why are we going after this truck, anyway?" Hoagie asked.
"Seeing as you've only been in the Kids Next Door for about a week and a half," Monty began, "I can't blame you for not knowing about how we arrested a certain group of ice cream men last month, after they wouldn't stop for kids and would only sell ice cream to adults."
"I guess you could say they were giving kids the...cold shoulder!"
"...um, sure. Anyway, one of them escaped the other day, and I'll bet anything that's him."
"But how're we gonna catch him if we don't have weapons yet?"
"We'll find a way. Just to be safe, can this thing stand a crash?"
"WHAT?!"
As if to answer Monty's question, the camper crashed into the ice cream truck, bringing both vehicles to a screeching halt. Monty jumped out of the crashed camper to confront the ice cream man, while Hoagie looked around him, figuring out just how bad the damage was.
"Well, nothing I can't fix..." he sighed, getting out of his seat. Hoagie got out of the camper to see a group of kids surrounding the area. Monty had the ice cream man cuffed, and was speaking into a communicator. Hoagie ran over to join his leader.
"Did you contact the KND Prison?" Hoagie asked.
"They agreed to send a couple of operatives, after I told them we weren't going to be able to do it ourselves."
"Sounds good. Well, we'd better get go-OOF!"
Hoagie had just bumped into one of the kids in the crowd, and both landed on the ground. Hoagie got up first, and turned to the girl he had accidentally knocked down.
"Sorry about that." he said, helping her up, "You okay?"
"Oh, I'm all right," she said, "Are you?" The slightly chubby girl was a little shorter than Hoagie, had blue-rimmed glasses and short brown hair, and was wearing a light blue dress.
"Hoagie, come on, let's-" Monty began, then noticed the girl.
"Betty?!" he exclaimed.
"I...take it you know each other?" Hoagie asked.
"Yeah, Betty's an old friend of me and Ben." Monty replied, approaching the two, "She and her family moved away more than a year ago, though."
"We're moving back now." Betty told the boys, then turned to Monty, "Who's your friend?"
"Betty, this is Hoagie." Monty answered, "I think you two will get along just fine."
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Hoagie and Nigel walked through the Gilligans' house, which had been completely trashed, as they tried to figure out what happened.
"Numbuh Two, are you sure you don't have anything Father wants?" Nigel asked, "It seems he thinks you do."
"I don't!" Hoagie told Nigel, then looked around at the rubble, "I'm just glad Mom's still out of the house...maybe Tommy and I could get most of this cleaned before she gets home."
"When is she coming home?"
"Um, around 6:00."
"Good. That will give the rest of the team enough time to investigate the area for any clues about why Father's after you, while we go track him down."
"You sure it's a good idea? I mean, he is after me..."
"Don't worry - I'll watch your back."
"As will...THE TOMMY!" shouted Tommy, from behind the boys.
"Tommy, you can't come." Hoagie sighed, "Stay here with the rest of Sector V."
"But I wanna fight Father with you guys!"
"You can't come with us, Tommy."
"Why not?!"
"It's too risky!"
"For you or me?"
"I'd say both."
"I fought Father before...I can do it again!"
"All right, all right, fine. You can come along."
As Hoagie and Nigel began to leave, Tommy remembered the ripped-out page in his pocket, and a question he had after reading a little bit of it.
"Hey, Numbuh One?" he asked, "Do you know anyone named Benedict Uno?"
"Why?" Nigel asked, looking a little nervous.
"Well, when Hoagie and I found Dad's page in the book of KND, I saw your dad's name, and then it mentioned a kid named Benedict Uno. I kinda guessed you were related..."
"He's my uncle." Nigel quickly responded, "Let's go."
The tone in Nigel's voice made Tommy suspicious, but he followed him and Hoagie without any comment.
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Post by faircod1965 on Apr 9, 2007 22:58:54 GMT
Another fantastic chapter, this is going to be a great story.
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Post by digigirl02 on Apr 10, 2007 3:26:24 GMT
Cool chapter, I like how you introduced Betty.
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Post by theorygirl on Apr 10, 2007 3:27:13 GMT
One tiny quibble: I don't think Monty would say "Ben and I." He seems more like the type to say "me and Ben." Other than that, a good chapter ^_^
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Post by artgirlb [a.k.a. Numbuh 138] on Apr 10, 2007 12:35:18 GMT
One tiny quibble: I don't think Monty would say "Ben and I." He seems more like the type to say "me and Ben." Other than that, a good chapter ^_^ Ooo, thanks for pointing that out ^^ *edits* And thanks for the good reviews so far, people Just wait'll you see what I have in store later on...
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Post by faircod1965 on Apr 10, 2007 15:46:41 GMT
This is going to be soopuh exciting.
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Post by julyeighth on Apr 11, 2007 23:43:13 GMT
I've just started to read this now, but I do have to say that I like it! I like how Nigel and Hoagie seemed to have inherited the same good attributes and positions and whatnot.
This is probably just me, but I don't really see the two of them would just let Tommy go with them after just a tiny bit of arguing/persuasion. But otherwise, everything's good!
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Post by artgirlb [a.k.a. Numbuh 138] on Apr 11, 2007 23:47:35 GMT
Hmmm...that's a good point. I'll keep it in mind for the rest of the story, so it turns out more IC Thanks!
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Post by hoagiegal1970 on Apr 11, 2007 23:51:58 GMT
This rocks. It's really well-written, and I'm really looking forward to what's coming. ;D
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Post by artgirlb [a.k.a. Numbuh 138] on Apr 22, 2007 4:56:48 GMT
I know, I know, I KNOW there's a slight "romantic" moment, when I said I wasn't planning on one. But it concerns two people we KNOW end up together anyway. So, technically, I'm not breaking my promise.
Besides, it's not the focus of the fic. --- Chapter Five "Hey, guys!" Hoagie called to Monty, Betty, and Ben. It was before school, and Hoagie was running towards the group, which was gathered near the flagpole. Monty and Betty met up with Hoagie, while Ben stayed near the flagpole, looking a little upset.
"What is it?" Monty asked. Hoagie pulled out a flyer from his pocket.
"Check this out," he said, showing the flyer for his friends to see.
"'Come to the First Annual Toobathon'," Betty read, "'An anything-goes tube race for kids of all ages!' Ooo, that sounds fun!"
"'Anything-goes', huh?" Monty remarked, looking intrigued.
"Yeah, according to this, you can design your own tube," Hoagie added, "AND there's trophies for first, second, and third place."
"I can't wait to see what you come up with." Betty told Hoagie, smiling.
"I don't need to come up with anything. I've been in these kinds of races before, and I've already got a tube...not to mention a little thing called 'farfegtubin'."
"What's 'farfegtubin'?" Monty asked.
"I'll explain at the race."
"So, when is Toobathon, anyway?"
"Next Saturday." Hoagie, responded, then looked over at Ben, who had been listening to the conversation.
"Hey, Ben!" Hoagie called to him, "You wanna come to Toobathon on Saturday?"
"I dunno..." Ben replied, "I don't know if I'd be that good..."
"C'mon, it'll be fun!"
Ben was silent, until the school bell rang, breaking the awkward silence. Ben went off on his own, while Hoagie, Monty, and Betty entered the school together.
"Is something wrong with Ben?" Hoagie asked.
"I think so." sighed Monty, "I mean, ever since I started hanging out with you, he's been...different."
"I've noticed it, too." Betty added, turning to Monty, "Remember last week at recess, when Hoagie invited us to play in that dodgeball game?"
"Yeah...that Australian girl really kicked our butts."
"But did you see how Ben looked when Hoagie arrived? He looked like he was annoyed by him. I can't remember any time when Ben thought anyone was annoying."
"Me neither."
"So...you think this might be my fault?" Hoagie asked.
"No. Ben still doesn't know you that well." Monty answered.
"Maybe I should try to be a little friendlier to him..."
"It could work."
"I'm gonna go to my locker." Betty told the boys, "See you, Monty! Bye, Hoagie!"
"See you later, Betty." Hoagie said.
"You know," Monty remarked slyly, "I think she's taking a liking to you."
"What do you mean?" Hoagie asked.
"Oh, nothing..." Monty replied, then headed for his locker.--- Nigel, Hoagie, and Tommy were in the S.C.A.M.P.E.R., hidden among a patch of trees near the Delightful Mansion. "You think the coast is clear?" Hoagie asked. "Father's probably still out looking for you." Nigel replied, "If I know Father, I know that he doesn't quit that easily." "So we can sneak in now?" "Right." The boys stepped out of the S.C.A.M.P.E.R., dashing towards the nearest window of the mansion. Nigel opened the window and let Hoagie and Tommy in, then crawled in himself. When the boys had gotten into the mansion, they noticed there were two hallways they could go down - one in front of them, and one on their right. "Numbuh Two, you and Tommy take that hallway," Nigel ordered, pointing to the one in front of them, "I'll take the one to the right." As Nigel headed down the hallway on the right, Hoagie and Tommy followed orders, and snuck down the hallway in front of them. "What are we looking for, anyway?" Tommy asked. "Anything that might tell us what Father's up to." Hoagie answered, looking around, "You know, Father's got an 'inner sanctum' downstairs - not even the Delightful Children are allowed there. If I were an evil villain, that's probably where I'd put anything to do with any evil plans I had." "Well, where is it?" "I'll show you - come on!" The brothers ran down the hallway, while, at the same time, made sure they weren't being detected. Suddenly, they heard the sound of a door opening and closing, and stopped in their tracks. "Father!" exclaimed five monotone voices, from behind a nearby door, "Where were you?! We woke up this morning and you weren't there..." "Sounds like Father just came home." Hoagie whispered, "Keep quiet." "Well, I was TRYING to track down that Numbuh Two kid," Father grumbled, "But-" "Numbuh... Two?" the Delightful Children said, dumbfounded. "Yes, Numbuh TWO. Now, as I was SAYING-" "But what would you want with a... doofus like Hoagie Gilligan?!" "It's not what I want from HIM...it's what I want from his DAD." Tommy and Hoagie looked at each other in shock at this last statement. "Does...does this mean Dad's alive?!" Tommy whispered. "It sounds like it." Hoagie replied. "Wait, how does Father know our dad?" "I don't know, but if Dad's alive, we've gotta find him before Father does."
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