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Post by ♥Comet..Adie♥ on May 12, 2007 22:49:38 GMT
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Post by numbah27 on May 14, 2007 1:27:35 GMT
Aaaaw, it's so sweet and cute! Nice one! I like how you added in the song lyrics. That song is the bomb.
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Post by faircod1965 on May 14, 2007 12:12:47 GMT
This is a very nice story, well written too.
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Post by ♥Comet..Adie♥ on May 14, 2007 23:31:42 GMT
Thankies ^_^
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Post by Shwoo on May 15, 2007 1:12:02 GMT
I'd just like to inform you that songfics are banned on fanfiction.net, so you'll have to remove the lyrics.
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Post by numbuheightbitstar on May 15, 2007 6:20:25 GMT
Great story *Clap*
The only problem I had was I was that I found the setting unclear--I thought Kuki and Wally were in a store at first, cuz it talks about him having to shop, then it suddenly says "they went to Kuki's room." I'm not sure if that was an abrupt scene transition or if they were just in the treehouse the whole time.
Otherwise though, one of the better slashfics I've read.
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Post by ♥Comet..Adie♥ on May 19, 2007 1:22:14 GMT
yeah.. they were somewhere..not at a store.
Then they went to Kuki's so i imagined them to be at school or treehouse. Where ever.
I usually write when im super board..or late at night and my mind wanders when i write. So sometimes things get unclear.
And thank you for the compliment ^-^
As to Shwoo.. Most of my fanfics are songfics..havent been removed yet. So im not sure..i'll just let the ppl takem em down bythemselves.
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