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Post by 362 on Apr 7, 2005 23:27:01 GMT
Caught
Out
Of
Line
This is a 2/5ness fic, and it speaks for itself...
"Numbuh5?" A warm and sweet voice called out. Numbuh5 opened her eyes a little to catch a glimpse of 2. "Are you awake?" 2 asked. 5 opened her eyes more. "2?" she asked. "I had a terrible dream last night 2!" she said leaning on hoagie's shoulder, 2 was now sitting on her bead beside her. "Yeah, I heard you yelling, so I decided to get you up." hoagie smiled. "Glad you did too." Abby smiled as both got up. Abby smiled at hoagie. "what?" hoagie asked. "Your my best friend." Abby replied hugging him. Hoagie was some-what shocked but smiled and hugged her back.
"You better hurry, you'll be late." hoagie said gentelly grabbing her shoulder to pull her away so he could look into her eyes. "late? for what?" Abby asked. "remember...3 and you are supposed to go shopping today." hoagie smiled. "Oh yeah, thanks 2." she smiled running out of her room.
When she was ready she had her usual outfit on waiting outside Kuki's room. When she came out she had a t-shirt with a big rain-bow-monkey on it and some jeans. "ready?" Abby asked. "Of corse silly." Kuki smiled as the two went to the mall.
"So how's life?" Kuki randomnly asked. "Uh...fine, you?" Abby asked. "no complaints here." kuki smiled. Abby caught a glimpse of the popular girls she called her so called 'friends'. "I'll be right back." she said walking to them.
"I so totaly hate those little monkey things-oh hi Abby." said her tan friend Alexa. "Hi Alexa, I'm still sittin at the cool table with ya'll right?" Abby asked. "Oh Abby, you know we have room." said the black girl beside Alexa. "Trust us Abby, your one of us populars now, you DO trust us right?" The black girl on the other side of Alexa asked. "Yeah, I'll see you tommorow then." Abby said. "Ok." Alexa waved
"She totaly thinks she's all that." said Alexa groaned. "Don't you think so Shanielle?" she asked the black girl to her left. "Oh...totaly." Shanielle replied. "Danielle?" she turned to her right. "deffinetly." Danielle nodded. "Well she wont be that popular when we break out our spare now will she?" Alexa asked. "Nope." shanielle replied blowing a bubbled with her bubble gum. "No way." Danielle replied.
"Who were they?" Kuki asked when she returned.
"Oh some popular friends of mine. So what were we talking about?" Abby asked.
"Life?" Kuki asked.
"Oh right." Abby blushed.
"Are you sure they're your friends?" Kuki asked.
"Duh, their nice to me and...why do you care?" Abby asked.
"Geez, I'm sorry." Kuki glared at the floor.
"Listen girl, I'm tired can we head back?" Abby asked.
"Um...ok?" Kuki replied.
So the two headed back to sector v. "back so soon?" hoagie asked. "Yeah I'm beat." Abby sighed. "Well I just fluffed the pillows why now sit down?" hoagie asked. "Thanks 2." Abby smiled sitting down.
(Thankyou so much for the advice Tako. Just tell me if I made any mistakes...thanks!)
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Post by tako on Apr 8, 2005 2:16:45 GMT
Good start so far! I like how you portrayed the popular girls. Some girls seriously do that kind of stuff all the time. One suggestion though: whenever a new person starts talking, you should make a new paragraph. That way, the reader doesn't get confused about who's talking.
For example, this paragraph:
... should look like this:
Anyway, I like this. The 2/5ness was cute. ^^
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Post by 362 on Apr 9, 2005 1:42:21 GMT
(glad u like the 2/5ness!)
Kuki went to her room for something while Abby sat down. Abby looked over to Hoagie catching him staring at her. "Well what?" she asked
"Well nuthin." Hoagie blushed
"You were staring at me 2...don't deny it." Abby giggled
"Well...it's just that your so...well...nevermind." Hoagie said getting red
"What?" Abby asked
"Well..it's just...well...what I mean is...your just...so...so pretty." hoagie blushed
"You really think so?" Abby asked.
"I'll always think so." hoagie winked.
Abby blushed when Nigel called her from another room. "Abby?" he asked. "What's goin down 1?" she asked walking in. "Your sister Cree wants you home." Nigel replied. "Oh...ok...bye." Abby sighed. "Good day 5." Nigel waved. Hoagie sighed. "I gotta go 2." she said walking to him. "Yeah..I heard." Hoagie groaned. "Well I'll see ya tommorrow." Abby said walking out the door
Hoagie sighed. "Yeah...later." Abby walked back in. "Forget sumthin?" Hoagie asked. "Yep." Abby winked and gave him a kiss on his right cheek. "That." Abby smiled. "bye hoagie!" she waved walking out.
Then wally came back in.
"Hey 2....why are you blushing?" Wally asked
"No reason.." hoagie turned away.
"Is it 5 again?" Wally smirked.
Hoagie sighed. "Yeah...but you can't argue with that...she's nice funny, cool." hoagie smiled
"All that and a bag of chips?" wally asked.
Hoagie looked at him confuzed. "Well I was just throwin it out there." wally smiled.
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Post by Numbuh 1024 on Apr 9, 2005 17:44:06 GMT
Finally! A change from the swarm of 1/5 fics on FF.net!
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Post by 362 on Apr 10, 2005 8:59:11 GMT
The next dat Abby walked to school hapily despite the cool breeze coming through. "Abby!" someone yelled behind her.
"Huh?" she asked seeing hoagie
Hey Abby." hoagie smiled catching up with her
Abby blushed. "Did-did you just call me Abby?"
"uh...yeah, is that ok?" hoagie asked
Abby giggled. "Yeah, I like that."
"Really?" hoagie asked
"Well...yeah." Abby nodded
"I'm glad, so what're ya gonna do today?" he asked
"Well, I'm eating lunch with Alexa-"
"The popular Alexa?" hoagie asked
"Yeah, why?" Abby asked
"Abby, she's bad news. You shouldn't try to fit in with her." hoagie sighed
"Why not? Everyone else mght laugh at me-"
"Who cares what people think?" hoagie asked.
"Would you just chill out, I'm popular now." Abby said slowing down
"Yeah but..." hoagie started
"But nuthin, your jusr jelous!" Abby said
"but Abby-"
"Listen my life finally gets good today, could you try not to screw it up?" Abby coldly asked runnin off.
"Abby!" he called after her trying to catch up.
~at lunch~
Abby was calming down as she walked over to Alexa's table.
"Hey Alexa...girls." Abby smiled
"Abby." Shanielle and Danielle mumbeled.
"So can I sit here?" Abby asked.
"Oh Abby, there's plenty of room-" Alexa started
"Great!" Abby smiled
"Over there." Alexa pointed to a table with no one at it.
"Yeah, Natasha is a substitute so she's sitting here with her sister Jazz." Shanielle smirked
"Which means we don't have anymore room." Danielle finished
"uh..come on you girls!" Abby giggled
No one spoke but sudenlly Natasha came out and was holding the back of Jazz's shirt dragging her in and they sat down
"We'll talk later." Alexa smirked
Abby slowly walked to the empty table and ate alone.
"May I join you?" Nigel asked walking up to her
"what?" Abby asked looking up. "Oh sure." She nodded
"Something wrong?" Nigel asked.
"No I'm fine." Abby frowned
"Come on Abby, tell me." Nigel pleaded
"It's Alexa, she said I could sit with her today, but then she said they had me replaced." Abby sighed.
"You trusted her?" Nigel asked
"Well 2 told me not to this morning." Abby confessed
"And you didn't listen?" Nigel asked
Abby sadly nodded.
"Well you should apoligies." Nigel suggested
"Apoligies?!" Abby asked standing up a little.
"Well...he was right." Nigel replied.
"No way 1! He's a know it all andI hate him!" Abby yelled
"You don't mean that 5." Nigel insisted.
"No 1, what I mean is I love 2." she said.
"Wha? You do?" Nigel asked
"No that's not what I meant..listen I gotta go!" Abby said walking away.
As she got to her locked she leaned her back to it. "If that's not what you meant...then what did you mean?" Abby asked herself
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Post by 362 on Apr 10, 2005 10:27:28 GMT
~the next day~
Abby was by her locker as she glnced over to Alexa and her possy who were laughing at her
She slamed her locker and all of the sudden Alexa prposely hit Abby's shoulder with her own
"Um...exscuze you." she snapped.
Abby ignored it and Jazz came up to her.
"Hey Abby." She smiled
"Oh hey 930." Abby smiled
"You can call me Jazz." 930 giggled
"Well what you want?" Abby asked
"Abby are you mad at me?" Jazz asked confuzed
"Well now your apart of Alexa's crew so yeah." Abby snapped
"Ouch, Abby I ain't in her possy." Jazz said
"You ain't?" Abby asked
"Hell no, I was just sittin there cuz Natasha dragged me litterally into it." Jazz sighed.
"Oh." Abby sghed too.
"I ain't popular girl." Jazz said
"I'm sorry Jazz." Abby sighed.
"It's ok girl." Jazz smiled. "What's wrong with Hank?" she asked pointing to a sad faced hoagie
"I think I hurt his feelings Jazz." Abby stared at the ground
"How?" Jazz asked
"Jazz, would you go ask him what's wrong?" Abby quickly changed the subject.
Jazz shrugged and walked over to him.
"Well?" Abby asked when she came back.
"Girl you better apoligies to him, he hurt alright." Jazz replied
"Well I'll do that at lunch." Abby said.
*The bell rings*
"Well I see you at lunch?" Jazz asked.
"Yeah seeya." Abby nodded
Jazz shrugged again and walked in her English class.
~at lunch~
Abby slowly walked in the cafeteria seeing Hoagie and Jazz talkin. She overheard some of it.
"Hank you so funny!" Jazz giggled as Abby sat with them.
"Hey ya'll." Abby smiled
"Hey Abby." Hoagie smiled
"Hoagie...listen-" Abby started but was interupted
"Hey Abby?" Alexa asked.
"What?" Abby snapped
"You might wanna get up." Shanielle giggled
"What? Why?" Abby asked.
"You got mustard n yo rear." Danielle giggled
Abby got up to see her back side covered with a wad od mustard. Jazz gasped and grabbed Abby's arm pulling her into the girls room.
"Girl thanks." Abby smiled.
"No probs." Jazz smiled back.
"What were you two laughin 'bout?" Abby asked
"Oh he was tellin me sum story." Jazz smiled
"If you say so." Abby shrugged.
"Girl what you thinkin 'bout?" Jazz asked
"Nuthin...ain't nuthin you gotta worry 'bout anyways." Abby replied
"If it 'but me, you tell me." Jazz said.
Alexa in her crew came in. "Hey jazz, why are you hangin out with this foo?" Alexa asked.
"Look who talkin." Jazz mumbeled.
"Ohhh." Shanielle giggled
Alexa pushed Abby out the way and grabbed Jazz by the shirt collar.
"Girl I heard that take it back!" alexa yelled
"Na." Jazz mumbeled
"What you say to her?" Danielle asked
"I said Na, I ain't need to take back anything." Jazz glared
"Take it back or you get hurt!" Alexa yelled.
"Na girl, I ain't taken anything back to the likes of you." Jazz said still bein help by her shirt collar,
Alexa threw her up against a wall and struck her across the face.
Jazz winced but shook it off.
"You mess with Alexa..." Alexa said giving Jazz a punch in the stomach. "You been messin up." She laughed giving her one last strike on her face leaving a scar.
"Next time I ain't gonna be so nice." Alexa growled leaving the two behind.
"Holy crap you have it rough Jazz!" Abby gasped
"Yeah well...I don't take back things that don't need to be taken back." Jazz said trying to get up.
"I'll take you to the nurses office girl." Abby said helping her up.
"Ok." Jazz groaned as Abby helped her walk to the nurse
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Post by 362 on Apr 12, 2005 19:45:55 GMT
After they got out of the nurses office Jazz had holes in her shirt and black bruises on her legs and arms.
"Feel any better?" Abby asked
"Yeah." Jazz groaned.
As they walked and talked Kuki walked up to e'm.
"Hi you...what happened 930?" she asked looking at jazz
"alexa and her crew." Abby sighed
"I knew it." Kuki sighed
"You guys! Don't worry 'bout it, I'm fine." Jazz groaned
"Yeah right." Abby snapped
"930 you aren't ok look at you!" Kuki said
"well...Oh ok I guess your...right." Jazz sighed.
"Thought so." Abby smirked
"How am I gonna explain this to my parents?" Jazz asked
"We could help you." Abby smiled putting an arm around Jazz.
"Yeah 930 we got your back." Kuki yelled.
"Uh...3? Don't ever say that again." Abby giggled.
"3, you know you can call me Jazz right?" Jazz asked
"Yeah...why?" Kuki asked
"Well..." Jazz thought
"She prefers Jazz." Abby blurted out.
"Oh ok." Kuki smiled.
"Anyway, we can help you with this." Abby smirked taking out some coverup.
"Oooh girl, you read my mind." Jazz smiled.
"Ya know it." Abby replied
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Post by 362 on Apr 20, 2005 23:03:05 GMT
As they got finishes Jazz suggested they'd come to her sector not that far away so they all walked to the tree house
When Jazz opened the door some huge blueprints were shooved right in her face Jazz nudged her way in and saw 932 smiling up at her
"What're theese 932?" she asked
"Well my newest blue prints of course!" 932 smiled
"What new inventions could you have possibly thought up?" Jazz asked
"Hey, I am the geiniess in the sector right?" 932 smirked
"Oh...alright, so what is it this time?" Jazz asked
"A morpher!" 932 said loudly
"what?" Jazz asked
"For sir" 932 conrinued
"What's it do?" Abby asked
"It's something that lets Sir morph into anything you want" 932 pointed at Jazz
"I want?" Jazz asked
"Yeah, you just comand Sir to morph into what and when" 932 grinned
"Really?" Jazz asked
932 just nodded
"That's brilliant!" Jazz smiled
"It is?" Abby and 932 asked
"Yeah! Now I have the ultimate disguise for Sir!" Jazz smiled
"I knew you'd like it" 932 smiled
"Like it? I love it!" Jazz yelled
Then 931 walked in
"Hey...do we have any guns?" he asked
"I'm the gun handeler" Jazz rolled her eyes
"I know, but 933 is annoying me...do I have permission to hit her with the water baloong gun?" he asked
"well....ok" Jazz giggled
"So I brought 5 and 3" Jazz said walking in
"Hey you guys!" 932 waved
"Hey 932" Abby grinned
"So...Abby...when are you gonna apoligies to you know who?" Jazz asked
"Thanks for reminding me...we'll get goin and I'll see him there...hopefully" Abby replied
"Ok" Jazz sighed
"See ya tommorrow at school?" she asked
"Yeah...bye" Jazz waved and looked at the blueprints with 932 again
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Post by 362 on Apr 23, 2005 1:02:48 GMT
Abby ran tp her treehouse hoping to catch up to hoagie she ran in the treehouse quickly seeing hoagie and wally both playing video games once the screen read game over Abby walked beside hoagie and he glanced up at her
"Hey" Abby sighed
"Uh....hey" Hoagie smiled
"Look...I just really feel bad about what I did to you...you know...the past few days?" Abby sighed
Hoagie nodded
"Well I'm really really sorry" Abby smiled
Hoagie smiled back
"Could you ever...ever forgive me?" she asked
"Already done" Hoagie smiled standing up
Abby blushed but gave him a hug
Hoagie blushed too and hugged back
"A-Abby?" he asked
Abby looked up at him "mmm-hmm?"
"We've known eachother a long time right?" he asked
Abby nodded not too sure what he was gettin too
"Well...would it be too pushy if..." Hoagie stammered
Abby kept looking at him
"If...if" hoagie started to sweat
Abby nodded "if?"
"If I-I said" he continued
"Keep goin" Abby replied
"that I...I" he continued
"Yes?" Abby asked patiently
"I kinda like you..." he wiped the sweat off his forehead
Abby gave him a promising smiled making him confident
"more than...well....just a friend?" he asked
"Like a best friend" Abby asked
"More than that" he sighed
"well what then?" Abby asked
"As a couple I guess" he smiled nervously
Abby gasped but hugged him again
"Oh Hoagie....of cotse I wouldn't be mad..." Abby smiled
Hoagie smiled hugging her tighter "because...I..." he started
"I love you too" she smiled
he smiled at her blushing
"Wanna grab some early dinner...er....sumthin?" she asked
Hoagie nodded so the two walked away arm and arm
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Post by 362 on Apr 29, 2005 22:24:20 GMT
Alexa, Shanielle, and Danielle were all somewhere eating and laughing
"I've got to admit...no one is all that" Alexa smiled
"What you talking 'bout?" Shanielle asked
"Yeah" Danielle echoed
"Let me finish" Alexa calmly said
"Ok" Shanielle and Danielle smiled
"No ones all that...but...we my possy, have got an exscuse" Alexa giggled
Danielle giggled "We're better than anyone...but you do know that certain peeps think they better than us"
Shanielle nodded "Yeah, like for example that Kelly girl"
"No...what about that Abby" Danielle smirked
Alexa sighed again "We Jazz and Abby good"
"Yeah...but they need to be taught a lesson" Shanielle smirked
"True...what you gals have in mind?" Alexa asked
"We should totaly frame them for TPing one of the teachers places" Danielle nodded
"No, we should so go with sneaking in when she's not home and turn her clothes pink" Shanielle laughed
"Yeah that's good, but we could also steal something from her" Danielle smiled evily
"Yeah or-" Shanielle started
"Wait!" Alexa demanded
Shanielle and Danielle looked up at her
"Did you say...steal?" Alexa asked smirking evily
Danielle nodded "Like her homework"
"I say...we steal that cute hoagie guy from her" Alexa smiled more evil
"Yeah...but which one of us?" Shanielle asked
"Mwa" Alexa giggled
"That's so brilliant idn't it D?" Shanielle asked
"Oh...of corse it is...it beats our plans" Danielle nodded
"Look who just sparked our plan girls" Alexa pointed to the door where Abby and Hoagie walked in
"Give me a while...I'll get that guy to get over here" Alexa smirked
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Post by macman7 on May 5, 2005 22:54:10 GMT
Awsome just awsome please continue.
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Post by 362 on May 7, 2005 1:35:44 GMT
(thanx...I'll update sooner or later)
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Post by 362 on May 27, 2005 16:36:40 GMT
UPDATE!
At Abby and Hoagie's table they were just sitting down.
"So, how's it goin?" Abby asked
"Good" Hoagie nodded "You?"
"Great" Abby smiled
"So....how's your sister doing?" Hoagie asked.
"From what I hear good-" Abby started.
"Oh Hank" Alexa waved.
"Could you come over here for a second?" Shanielle asked.
"Yeah, we have a question" Danielle nodded.
Abby looked at him and shook her head. "Don't do it" she pleaded
"Please?" Alexa asked.
"It's ok, I'll be right back" Hoagie walked toward them.
"Hi" Alexa smiled.
"uh...hi...you have a question for me?" He asked
"Yeah" Danielle and shanielle both made him sit down.
"You know that dance coming up at school?" Alexa asked.
"um....yeah" Hoagie nodded.
"Well I was wondering if you'd go with mwa" she smiled
"I dunno, I was kinda gonna ask Abby" he said almost in a whisper.
Alexa sighed and grabbed her celli. "Well, I'll just tell my father that not even Hank Gilligian will go with me"
Hoagie shook his head "ok, ok, I'll go"
"Great" she put the phone back in her pocket.
"Be at my house tommorow at six sharp, not a minute later" she smirked.
As Alexa and the other two started out the door Shanielle and Danielle went back up to him.
"Don't be late, and wear somethin nice" Shanielle smirked.
"Yeah, and bring a rose and some candy" Danielle nodded.
"And ask her for her phone number so you can call her the day right after" Shanielle nodded as the two started walking away.
"Great....houston we have a problem" Hoagie sighed.
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Post by macman7 on May 27, 2005 17:45:51 GMT
Yes an update! Great chapter Natasha. Please continue.
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Post by Numbuh 1024 on May 27, 2005 18:06:43 GMT
Thanks for the update. Nice story so far.
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